Not sure if Yea Forums legal but, original song

For 4chans consideration. Feel free to roast me, critique, or approve.


youtu.be/LCROEVhNuNQ

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Aha! Want me to roast you now, eh? Well faggot your shoes are soo last season and your crush is being fucked by dj dubbi every night.

My shoes are in that video? Lol
I wear Jordan 1's like an oldfg

Just say bump, dont larp dude it's not cool.

I didn't? This is op, shoe guy couldnt even bother to watch video :(

one of the biggest fags i've seen on here in a long time

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Idk why you think that 2nd post was me but okay.

I also must be you, and the guy who said not to larp, im all of them. Cause no one could of possibly responded right? Fucking retard.

Ooh boy, an early 20s guy playing acoustic guitar with a capo. This is going to be interesting.

Im 28 unfortunately, i never play wonder wall though if its any consolation.

yikes is this the type of basement dweller incel i share a board with?

How rude, its not a basement!

its a manchilds room

Ay but not a basement!

14 year old core

okay honest critique

strong start
middle of the first verse feels a little forced
dig the chorus, generic but good, full band would help
chorus has a satisfying end
whole second verse seems a bit contrived, blame your mistakes on me is a good line

overall you'll probably get lambasted by SJWs for victim blaming for the general theme of the chorus, catchy but generic, strong 6/10 at a music festival, 8/10 at a bar

Thanks man, the lyrics.dont paint the picture very well but it was about a relationship I had with a Narcissist.

well what did they see you as? maybe add a bridge saying something from her point of view

Not sure she is in general a phychopath and ive completely cut them off.

and yet you are on Yea Forums and therefore totally mentally stable, got it

Listen man, i make music for fun and do it maybe once a twice a year if that but I in general want to know what other people think of it so I can improve because I cant accurately critique my own work. I also work overnights and get bored af. Hence Yea Forums

okay so go play some bars and watch people's faces
at an open mic, people only expect/want you to play 2 or 3 songs so get out there dawg

>Not sure if Yea Forums legal
What did he mean by this?

Some threads you cant post links

First I've heard of this.