Viper

>It's cloudy dense instrumentation
should be 'its'
>if summer fog had a soundtrack, this would be it
either make that a new sentence or ad a hyphen before it

>his balls deep baritone voice box

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>it's 1 hour runtime
should be 'its'
you should type 'one' instead of '1'

>some of my favorite songs are. Parlayin', I'm A gangsta... etc.
change the comma to a colon or just get rid of it all together
also you should capitalize song titles

>that last scentence
holy fuck user that is a massive run-on sentence. add some fucking periods.
also get rid of 'trifecta' unless you actually expand on that. it makes no sense

>creative writing class
why would you waste your time on shit like that

Thanks for the feedback ill fix it
I can write entertaining stories so its alrights

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10/10 thread deeply entertained

I would move all this personal shit about his company to the end in a “where is he today” paragraph or something. Seems really out of place when you’re reviewing an album.

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I'm aware of that I just think it's funny

what grade are you in

can i get a tl;dr

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beautiful

Señior

Whatya a bitch or something

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a masterpiece.

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