>folk pop >guitar harmony and layering >anco-esque yelping here and there
I've been working on this one on and off for a while and I'm really happy with how it turned out. Give it a listen and let me know what you like and what you don't.
Of course, I'll be back in a few to listen to what everyone else is posting.
this kind of sounds like a broken ringtone, not sure if that's what you were going for, maybe if laid down a weird beat underneath to create some cool polyrhythms?
The guitar layers are beautiful. I'm guessing the "yelps" are the aaahs in the background? I really like those too. I don't really have much negative to say about it, it's the perfect length for what it is and despite being "repetitive" it never gets boring.
I love this, your vocals are good and the melodies even better. That main lead guitar riff is just amazing. Followed. I'm barely ever on Soundcloud to listen to music apart from these threads, are you anywhere else?
>gatesoflove.bandcamp.com/album/your-holy-heart 1st track completely took me by surprise because I didn't know what to expect, I really like all the sounds but "please" gets really repetitive. 2nd song vocals are too loud for my taste, strange rhythm to the song but that's really cool, just might need to be squeezed together a little bit as it falls off beat it feels some times. You've actually got a good voice but it seems like you're not quite confident in the melodies you've set up for yourself so the execution comes off a little strange. Everything definitely has a video game soundtrack feel to it "one touch seemed like it had a bit more energy than other tracks, but I was hoping for one or two boss theme like songs. As far as mix and production stuff goes everything seems well enough mixed, but this is very far from anything I've ever really listened to so I'm not sure that my advise really means much of anything.
Benjamin Torres
New song: Outside to Inside [instrumental]: vocaroo.com/i/s10ju3kSS1DW >space rock >noise rock >dream pop
I like the vocals on Jungle Swallow, very psychedelic sound and a catchy melody. What's not to love?
Getting some twig vibes, just guitar and voice. I like the composition but the recording can obviously be improved, like you say, "these tracks are just [your] notes basically." There is potential here for sure.
Not really but I dig some of the vibes on Colourful Sadness.
this is super chill, I really love "dont leave" got some crisp-ass production "black clouds going away" is pretty cool too
"Outside to Inside" starts off a bit rough but i presume this is the intention; i actually love how noisy it is, this is some really nice psychedelic noise pop
oh wow this is absurdly beautiful you mind if i download this? I want to be able to listen to it as often as i can, it's gorgeous you ever think about making any dungeon synth/fantasy synth soundtracks?
>oh wow this is absurdly beautiful thanks, I'm glad you liked it. I'm making a symphony with the Arturia synths right now, two movements are done, this is the other one
Wow this is stunning, I really like this. What a beautiful synth and a great composition on your part too. Is there a more permanent place to find your music like sc or bc?
Gabriel Myers
Yeah, I put a lot of verb on the yelping to make it less abrasive and in your face, more to just sugar coat and decorate the song a bit.
Eli Foster
I made only arrangements of video game music so far, this is my first original work... when it's finished I'll upload it, too
There are quite a few things that need improvement here, but overall there's some serious potential. You have a decent voice and the guitar and vocal melodies work well together. The biggest thing I would focus on is the lyrics honestly, they can come off as a little corny sometimes. The way that you write the guitar parts is good, but the performance on the recording is a little shaky. I know that it's just a demo, but these are a few things to keep in mind.
After listening to your most recent track it seems like there are some really nice sonic textures at play but I feel like it's mixed almost entirely at the center. This would feel a lot nicer if you expanded the mix and added more sounds to the lower and higher frequencies.
indie folk mixed with experimental music overall trippy and also really corny if you wanna send me advice ([email protected])
Isaiah Fisher
I really like the opening of Jungle Swallow. The fire crackling is a nice touch, too. The vocals sound like they're falling off the track at times, not sure if I like that or don't. Other than that, the melody and performance is pretty good too.
Michael Torres
thank you, i appreciate the feedback. I definitely need to work on adding more instrumentation, i'm doing shit with percussion, probably just electronic drum tracks as it stands though
and yeah i also should be practicing with a metronome lel
I can definitely see the lyrics coming off as corny though, haha, i'm way too into "muh feels"; what do you feel would help mitigate that?
Matthew Richardson
wow that mixing sounds really professional and everything seems to be in place, no wrong notes etc., sometimes a bit monotonous, but I really would listen to this
Carson Foster
damn yeah, i really like this; can't wait to see what you have when you put it all together
Jacob Bennett
Your production throughout the songs I've listened to so far is really unique. It's very wishy-washy, I'd call it, and gives what could be a normal acoustic song so much more character. It feels so much dreamier than I'd usually expect from folky tunes.
Jace Thomas
thanks man... I think I'll upload it next month, I'm working on a new sonata with Zelda themes, too
Connor Adams
Not the person you're responding to, but a good way to make lyrics less corny is by either making them really specific to you, or by being very vague. Basically, you want people to connect to what you're saying and not feel like your psychologist. Vague lyrics (bon iver, radiohead's kid a) make it easier to grasp on to but can be harder to write. Specific lyrics (like carrie and lowel for example) have this weird way of being relatable in a non-direct way.
Logan Moore
Honestly there's no real trick to writing good lyrics, it just takes a lot of self-reflection and practice. One direction I could honestly see you going in with this type of music is actually playing up the corny lyrics in a really self-referential way that's kind of kitschy and over-the-top if that makes sense. You can write some simple melodies, and if you really emphasize the corniness of the lyrics it can come off as sincere in a way, and then throwing in occasional out-of-character lyrics that are really jarring can be incredibly effective. I think that was really long-winded but I hope I helped in some way.
Hunter Campbell
no, you definitely did, i think i have a pretty good idea of what you're saying gonna take some practice but i feel like that's the direction I was naturally going to go in anyway (a lot of the bands i really like are of the same variety)
I've been going with the "specific to me" rout but of course there's still a lack of personality to it that I feel like being vague would better suit me. honestly Modest Mouse is likely what I'd like to aspire to, at least lyrically.
The rough start on Outside to Inside was not intentional and I plan on fixing it. I'm glad you enjoyed it regardless. I don't plan on releasing music on an actual platform anytime soon due to a lack of time to record/arrange demos into songs, poor work flow, and a lack of material for my first planned release (planning on doing an EP or album depending on how much I get done). The three songs I've posted so far are the only ones I've actually arranged out of 130+ GarageBand sketches. I also just find Vocaroo to be a quick and easy disposable audio host for uploading in these threads. The lofi sound is the result of recording guitar tracks on my phone, I don't have the budget to buy proper recording equipment. Thank you for listening.
personally i find it quite fitting of the noisy space/dream pop feel you're going for, but definitely on the lookout for what you're gonna do it fix it up, it's a slapper
I'm about to hit babby's first 100 followers! Writing a new track this week that's going to be a bit more relaxed to add some more sonic variety. soundcloud.com/b-rad-94 >alternative rock >punk >hard rock >post-hardcoreish? >garage reccs (get off vocaroo it slaughters sound quality)