Okay so firstly it's a shounen, just leaving this out here so you can btfo before wasting your time. I'd just like some opinions on if it's cool, I've come up with a world, a basic storyline, characters and the power-system. (2604 words total). Anyhow here goes:
>1. World: The story takes place in a world with magic (will be further explained in the power-system part). There are 3 main powers: The Nations, Gangs and Independents. There are 3 main nations in the story, the main-nation is called the Western Union, it’s a large empire with tons of islands and many advanced cities, the story starts in the third-biggest city known as Redzstork, it’s a less “industrialized” place than the other big cities, and takes inspiration from the type of Japanese towns you’d see in other animes, clearly advanced, but not really that huge.
The W.U’s capital, “Tri-Kings” is a giant city with 4 main fractions; the Commontown, where most of the people live, schools, shops, banks etc. are located. The Iron-Labyrinth, which is a huge industrial place, filled to the brim with factories, laboratories etc. And the Sludge, which is an almost unlivable wasteland filled with all the trash and other disgusting shit produced in the rest of the city, there are people who live here, and the gangs especially often go here because no one really watches over it, last is Goldtown, where the high-ranking mages, nobles and members of the government reside in. This city will become the main-base of the story.
The gangs play a huge role in the story, they basically rule over everything the government doesn’t. There are thousands of small-time gangs, but the far-majority of them are sub-groups of the 3 big ones; The Corpsefaces, The Yakuza and The Bluebloods. The Corpsefaces are a heavily violent gang, mainly focusing on chaos and just being free, they rarely bother the government or riot, but their sheer threat-factor and the strength of their leaders earned them heavy influence, if they get pissed off they can fuck up the entire Commontown and they’d take too many resources to get rid of.
The Yakuza are very organized, and deal in underground marketing, they don’t make a lot of enemies because they basically play for all teams at once, and just do everything to turn a profit, their influence even spreads into the nobles and the government. The Bluebloods are a gang started by nobles and government-tied people who defected, and decided to the life of crime, each for their own reasons, they have the most enemies, and are at an essential turf-war with the Corpsefaces, they’re easily the most “criminalistic” of the gangs. Whilst the Corpsefaces just do it to for the fuck of it, and the Yakuza do it for business, the Bluebloods are heavily influenced by political beliefs and thirst for control.
The Government has 3 leading factions: The Head-Government, the mages and the industrialists. The Head-Government looks out for the nation, and leads the entire thing, their job is to ensure that everything stays in order and to maintain balance. The mages are basically the military, police and teachers, they have multiple purposes including participating in wars and carrying out the Government’s orders within the country. Each official mage is assigned a rank: Low-Sorcerer, Wizard, Magus, Archmage and the Grand-Archmage.
Thomas Jackson
The Low-sorcerers are your everyday police-officers or foot-soldiers, they have a solid grasp of magic but nothing too exceptional. Wizards and Maguses make up educators, police-chiefs, private-hunters etc. Archmages are like generals, they’re military leaders and they have heavy influence within the nation, they possess the same qualities are the lower classes and have exceptionally high abilities. The Grand-Archmages are a group of about a dozen who have the highest prowess in magic within the entire nation, these are people known throughout the world and they’re highly respected, or feared depending on your perspective. These are basically the peak of what magic can achieve, the also often have a solid grasp of Aura or possess External Magic.
For the independents there are Cults and other smaller groups. The cults are groups of people who practice illegal ritual-magic, do human sacrifice and work with demon-magic. To expand on demons, there are 5 main races in the world: Humans, Demons, Divines, Gods and “other” (smaller groups that aren’t very significant, like Elves, Vampires or Werewolves). Humans I just explained, Demons live in a different realm of humans and their powers aren’t very well comprehended, even trying to contact them is illegal. The Divines are basically Christian angels but anime-beamed, they are often worshipped in religious groups and their power can sometimes be summoned, but it’s rare. The Gods are a super-species who are extremely enigmatic, they are by far the strongest, but also the least active beings in the world, their powers can be called upon but it’s rare for a human to be able to get anything out of them, and it is not possible to get a god’s full power in any way shape or form. Though a few have gained their favour.
Caleb Reed
Also, to add here since it’s relevant in #2: There are 4 Dark Artifacts in the world: The Necronomicon, The Monkey’s Paw, The Headless Doll and The Crimson Parasite, which all have different properties and can be utilized to do unique things.
2. The power-system. There are 3 main categories of power: Human-magic, External Magic and Aura: Human-magic has 5 sub-categories: Transmutation, Emission, Enchantment, Summoning and Specialism. Transmutation can be anything between alchemy and making yourself look different. Emission is your basic-superpowers, being able to throw out lightning , but also to create illusions and other stuff like that. Enchantment is the ability to insert your magic into objects, beings or altering the way something works. Summoning is the ability to either summon or conjure objects, an element or living beings (living beings can only be summoned, not conjured). And Specialism is a “rare” class (about 33% of the population have specialism) which is basically bloodline-specific magic that no one else can learn.
External Magic can be ritual-magic, which is summoning demonic/divine powers with sacrifices or spells, the usage of dark artifacts, eating a Twisted Apple or a form of god-magic. The Dark Artifacts each have a unique Power: The Monkey’s Paw allows the user to either suspend, or completely remove some of their 5 senses, each finger contributes to 1 sense and make a wish using these senses as “tokens”, the weight of the wish is what decides whether or not it can be suspended or permanent, and how many senses have to be used for it. (For example killing someone takes 1 sense permanently, no way around that, but keeping someone away from you only suspends 1.) The Paw also has to be attached to the user’s arm (so they have to cut off their hand) for it to be usable.
Ethan Nguyen
The Necronomicon allows you to transfer lifespans, you can either steal lifespan from other people, transfer them to others, or you can even kill a person to revive another person, but the price of using the book is that every lifespan carries a part of the soul, which is bound permanently to the user’s own body, and eventually enough soul-fragments can drive a user insane or even physically deteriorate them.
The Headless Doll allows you to create a voodoo doll by taking a piece of someone’s flesh and attaching it to a spike where the head is meant to be, which essentially allows you to control the target. The price for this power is that the doll is constantly saps your life-force out as you hold it, and if you leave it it’s thirst for energy keeps rising, so by the time you pick it up again it will devour a massive amount of power.
The Crimson Parasite is a demonic lifeform which manifests itself as a sharp crystal, by stabbing this crystal into someone’s flesh the parasite will quickly fuse with their body, leaving a piece of demon-flesh at the injection spot. The parasite can then manifest itself anywhere on the user’s body and will significantly power them up physically (if you’ve seen Parasyte basically that but it’s a demon and a lot stronger than in Parasyte). But it will constantly consume nutrients from the user and has a never-ending bloodlust, which the user has to full or else it kills them and reverts back to its crystal-form.
Ethan Rivera
Too many factions. Not enough happening. What is the actual plot? This just sounds like an insanely generic piece of autistic worldbuilding. Also if this is a fantasy world, why are there yakuza?
Jeremiah Taylor
IF IT AINT SLICE OF LIFE IT AINT MY WIFE
Luis Reyes
God-magic is a very rare form of external magic which grants the user a fraction of a specific god’s power. The more “common” form of this magic is also known as Contract-Magic, where the user makes regular tributes to the respective god, and in exchange can summon a piece of their power. And pure god-magic, where the user has actually been granted a small piece of the god’s core, which allows their bodies to produce this magic and use it at will with no questions asked. The following gods will have their magic in the story: Agni, Anubis, Hypnos, Raijin, Fujin, an unnamed ice-god and an unnamed rain/water-god.
The Twisted Apples are odd-colored apples that sometimes fall from the sky, eating one will grant the user a limited reserve of a very specific power, the recorded Twisted Apples are: Null, Black, Orange, White and Brown + “The Bad Apple” which is thought to be a myth and hasn’t been seen in centuries.
And lastly: Aura. Aura is the rarest form of “natural” “magic” (about 5% of all humans can even manifest it, even less that that can use it effectively) which allows the user to exert their soul, emotions or willpower outside of their bodies and manifest it as power. Most Grand-Archmages can use Aura, but also some of the gang-leaders have it.
Nathan Ross
Ok, but who are the characters? There’s no way you could give all of this info across naturally.
Justin Taylor
I'd give it twelve chapters until the axe.
Jackson Jenkins
I'll get to it soon enough, I chose to first start with all the parts that build up the world and the characters so that I can properly explain the beginning of the story.
>3. Characters & their powers:
Kreis – The 16th “one” (the MC): Magical Prowess: Enchantment Other magic: “The Mark”.
The Arashi-Group:
Ruin – The Rainman Magical Prowess: Emission Other magic: Pure God-Magic (Rain/Water -god). Sin of Lust
Vigo – The Blizzard Magical Prowess: Emission Other magic: Pure God-Magic (Ice-god). Sin of Pride
Ryo – The Thunder Magical Prowess: unknown Other magic: Pure God-Magic (Raijin)
Saki – The Tornado Magical Prowess – Enchantment Other magic: Pure God-Magic (Fujin)
The Sins: (check #4 for explanation)
Argo Magical Prowess: Enchantment Other magic: Lycantrophy. Sin of Wrath.
Jaz Magical Prowess: Transmutation, Specialism – “Stacked Deck” Other Magic: Sin of Greed
Aubrie Magical Prowess: Summoning Other magic: Sin of Envy
Satou Magical Prowess: Unknown Other magic: Sin of Sloth
Mag Magical Prowess: Unknown Other magic: Sin of Gluttony Other relevant characters:
Yami – The Corpseface Status: Leader of Corpsefaces Magic Prowess: Emission Other magic: Aura, Black Apple.
Aku – The Shadow-King Status: Second-in-command of Corpsefaces. Older brother of Ruin Magic Prowess: Emission, Specialism – Darkness Other magic: Aura
Rubich – The Strongest Mage Status: Grand-Archmage Magic prowess: Specialism – “Collect” Other magic: Aura
Kayl Status: Eldest son of Rubich Magic prowess: none Other magic: God-contract: Agni
Zeoul Status: youngest son of Rubich Magic prowess: Specialism – “Copy” Other magic: none
Kuron – The Shinigami Status: Teacher + ex-hunter Magic prowess: Emission Other magic: God-contract: Anubis, Hypnos. Monkey’s Paw.
Lucifer Status: Leader of Demons. Member of 4 archangels. Power: Morning-Star
>4. Story: Introduction: Kreis is has applied and been accepted for a college/highschool (he’s 16 at the start) at the Ruby Dragon, which is a high-tier school at the capital “Tri-Kings”. He is sitting on a bench in an empty area of the town, he sees a man walking down the street about to cross it, and an out of control car driving right towards the man, he quickly dashes forth to push the apparently frozen-in-place man out of the way, and gets hit in the process, bleeding on the ground with the car already far away he thinks he’s going to die there. The man walks up to him and says out loud “I think I found someone, finally”, Kreis passes out and wakes up in a hospital, seemingly completely healthy. When he’s changing back to his clothes he notices a tattoo on his chest, he wonders where it came from, but doesn’t know what to do.
A few months pass by and he’s completely used to having it now. Since the school-season is starting he rents an apartment in TriKings and moves out. Nothing much happens during this period, once the first schoolyear has started he meets a kid named Zeoul and a girl named Aubrie and the 3 become friends (kind of). Few months of casual study, learning about basics of magic etc. go by, very basic introduction to the power-system.
Caleb Flores
>please remember lads, there is a posting-cooldown so I cant just instapost everything, it takes a while between each one.
The 1st real event - The Arashi incident: Few months have passed by and everything is going okay. One day it suddenly starts to rain, heavy wind starts blowing, thunder is raging, and some people swore they saw snow, the air becomes cold. The teachers suddenly tell every single student to get into the underground area of the school and draft a few 3rd-year students to stay with them. One of the people drafted is Kayl, Zeoul’s older brother. Kreis, Zeoul and Aubrie are curious what’s happening, and decide to sneak into a small shed at the inner yard of the school instead of going with the rest of the students.
The teachers and the third-years spend 2 hours preparing for something, the 3 wonder what will happen. Suddenly the entire ground and all the buildings soaked in water from the rain start freezing, and a thunderbolt strikes in the middle of the yard and 4 figures appear. The teachers immediately get into battle-stance and the 2 groups start talking. The group are called The Arashi and they’re the only 4 users of Pure God-Magic in the entire world, and they’ve seemingly come to take the Principal’s head for some reason.
A fight breaks out and both sides are clashing hard, but it seems like the Arashi have the advantage. Kreis suddenly feels an instinctive impulse and jumps forth, trying to help with his minor magic-knowledge, Vigo “The Blizzard” notices this and quickly blasts an ice-shard through Kreis’ heart, but only 10 second later Kreis stands back up, pulls the shard out and the wound has disappeared. Ruin and Vigo quickly notice something is off, and with a shocked look they simply say “so he’s the new one”.
Ryder Parker
Fuckkkk I don’t caaaaaare. You realise none of these ideas are even vaguely original right? Is this shitposting?
Liam Nguyen
The 2 suddenly tell the entire group to back out, and almost instantly all 4 of them leave. The principal takes Kreis into his office after all the injured have been taken to the nurse’s room. The two go through a long conversation, the principal brings up the mark, Kreis is confused as he’s never shown it to anyone and asks how he knows. The principal then explains what the mark is: Turns out it is called “The Mark of Cain”, which is an ancient curse passed down from person to person. The wielder of the mark is rendered immortal until they pass it down, and their goal is to bring together the 7 Deadly Sins; each Sin has a mark similar to Cain’s which grant them a unique power, and the Cain can take away and bestow these marks upon people he chooses.
The rest of the story progresses in arcs where Kreis is gathering the group back up and dealing with different things going on in the world, the planned arcs and their order are: -Getting in contact with Ruin & Vigo. -Finding Argo and Jaz. -Getting Satou to join up. -Zeoul-centered arc, his and Kayl’s backstory -Retrieving and bestowing the Sin of Envy. -Kreis’ capture. -Flashback arc about Jaz and Argo + the previous Cain -Fighting the Corpsefaces. -Ruin & Vigo flashback -Mag joining up. -Kreis’ father coming home, Cain’s purpose being revealed -Hell arc + revelations about humanity’s history -Yakuza-centered arc -National conflict arc -The series’ war-arc with the 2 other big nations -War-recovery arc -Archangels vs Sins arc -Final arc
Okay so this is the entire doc pasted here, I can answer questions if anyone unironically cares to read through this stuff.
Henry Nelson
Why should we care for these characters?
Nathaniel Baker
hey dont shoot him down this early
Ian Thompson
Why are you posting this on Yea Forums of all places?
Henry Walker
They were a part of the original doc I wrote and I psoted everything in order. You dont have to care, in fact I assume at least 90% of y'all dont.
Jeremiah Johnson
Do any of these characters have personalities?
It’s shit. He thought about the worldbuilding too much. You can’t jump into a world with this amount of pre-established shit and not have it feel awkward. Who is gonna explain it all?
Adam Bailey
underages aren't allowed here kid
Connor Collins
Because fucking nowhere is a good place, I've been looking through subreddits and other sites and nothing seems like an actually fitting place, so I chose Yea Forums because I like this site and it works.
Brandon White
>You dont have to care Good story, OP.
Parker Brown
Have the protagonist being isekai'd and get a massive infodump at the beginning, easy. Most LN garbage is like this.
Grayson Anderson
>bring together the Seven Deadly Sins Uh
Dylan Bell
>Idea guy
Aaron Young
OP. You could turn this into a light novel type thing, but I’ll say this now, there is no way this could possibly be more generic. It’s like every word you typed was stolen from something else. To make this gripping you need to be able to sum up the world simply at the start. Even Hunter x Hunter didn’t introduce nen until a decent amount in. What’s the selling point here? And also what is the end goal? Why should we want any of the characters to reach their goals? It’s like the anime equivalent of one of those Bethesda fetch quests where you’re just doing stuff because you’re told to.
Chase Morales
Yes. I don't want the MC to be another bland black-haired protagonist you see in like half the shows. Each characters has motives, personality-traits, quirks etc.
Evan Lopez
Ok here's an idea: OP's story, except the protagonist is a giant throbbing cock and the villains are different kinds of vaginas. The title would be >Reborn as a Massive Penis, I literally Can't Stop Slaying Pussy?!
Parker Morales
The issue is that you’ve already prepared a world that feels like everyone is gonna be like that. What’s the protagonist’s personality type? This kind of shit is way more important than the ridiculous amount of detail you went into with the magic systems.
Actually, if you’re planning on making something out of this I would suggest cutting the amount of magic stuff in half. There is no way you need that amount of shit. Nobody could possibly remember it.
Jaxson Cook
If I do make something out of this, which I do plan to do, I obviously wont introduce everything at once, most of this stuff gets introdouced as the story passes by, like The Arashi -group I plan to originally introdouce off as just users of a weird type of magic, Aura and Twisted Apples only are revealed as they become relevant etc. the way the Sins, or even the Mark of Cain work are only vaguely described in the beginning. The reason why I explain stuff here the way I do is because at this moment I am NOT writing it as a story, but as a concept.
Owen Bell
No, that’s still way too much to keep track of. It needs to be simplified significantly. This doesn’t lend itself to a story. Even if you’re introducing them over time, can you even imagine how convoluted it will be later on when there are 20 characters each using a separate type of magic that links to completely unrelated shit?
>I am NOT writing it as a story, but as a concept This is the issue. If you were writing it as a story you would see that it would seem like a constant information dump.
Leo Watson
I'm not making this as a marketing-project, I'm making this out of enjoyment, I'm EXTREMELY drawn towards world-building, which is why if I begin making this, it'll also be long, Im not looking to make the next One Piece or anything like that, Im just looking to make something which I enjoy making and want to know if others would enjoy reading it.
>What's the protagonist's personality type? Kreis is a very "two-faced" person, he in his mind aims to be rational and calm, but tends to become impulsive and emotional, and it's something he recognizes but dislikes, he feels disgusted by the idea of just working as an ordinary citizen, and his ambition is to first become a highly-respected mage, as he finds the idea exciting, as the Deadly Sins/Cain -plot unfolds his contradicting personality would make him contemplate heavily on what to do, but he decides to play along to see what it is like, and grows attached to the role and makes it his new goal in life.
Leo Richardson
Hold on OP, let me roll with your concept even though I think it's fucking gay lmao.
I'll write a chapter from the POV of your protagonist. Tell me what you think.
Carter Collins
Sounds like average LN garbage. People ITT claim it's shit and they're right, but I've seen much worse LNs getting praised here on Yea Forums.
Liam Nelson
You’ll probably need to work on the guy’s personality a lot, because he does end up sounding like one of those generic black haired protagonists. He’s just a mixture between the reserved kaneki/shinji type and the IMPULSIVE HEROIC Naruto/Luffy/Gon type. That’s not original, that’s just shoving the two most common types of shonen protagonist together. And is his character going to develop?
"Heroic" would be the wrong word, I plan to have him straight up kill a dude due to an outburst (not very early but still). And yes, he will have to grow as a person as time passes on. There will be events which will force him to do things he does not want to, he will have to turn down friends, and events which will cause his perspectives to be widened and force him to contradict himself.
Wyatt Watson
That's great and all but could any of them beat Madara Uchiha?
And I'm referring to Rinne Tensei Madara Uchiha with the Eternal Mangekyou Sharingan and Rinnegan doujutsus (with the rikidou paths ability) equipped with his Gunbai and control of the juubi and Gedou Mazou, a complete Susano'o, with Hashirama Senju's DNA implanted in his chest so he can perform Mokuton kekkei genkai and yin-yang release ninjutsu as well as being extremely skilled in taijutsu and bukijutsu.
Wyatt Phillips
With the feedback and contemplating I'm (((thinking))) of dropping the twisted apples concept, but I still have to think about this since the Bad Apple was supposed to play a part near the end.
Brayden Sanchez
>I'm (((thinking))) of dropping the twisted apples concept How does pic related fit into this?
These are such generic words though. What actually happens? It should be a given that characters develop. How is he going to be by the end?
Anthony Ortiz
Just try to write like a chapter of it. You’ll see what you need to change. I just don’t think the sheer amount of stuff will be able to be told naturally. I think if you just actually try to write it you will be able to tell what feels out of place.
Adam Richardson
Tell me what you think OP. Does it fit your vision? Is it against it?
Upon aquiring the mark and immortality, he will first think of it a blessing and essentially a toy, but he will eventually realize the importance of it, and will start taking his role seriously.
The Cain's "role" is to gather or transfer the 7 Sins, most of them do end up following him, but Envy specifically refuses, so he takes the Sin of Envy and has to look for a new holder. Zeoul want to be the one, and since they're friends he actively has to choose not to give it to him, and instead gives it to Aubrie, which does make him feel guilty.
Also one of the sins will die as a result of a battle, whom he had become good friends with, which will break him inside but also enforce his need to take his duty seriously and to become stronger.
His father is a Divine, he obviously does not know about this and when this is revealed it will spark a conflict, as the Cain is essentially a demonic vessel (not really, but definitely the opposite of a divine). Which forces him to turn against his father.
He will be captured by the government at one point, and they will try to push his immortality to it's limits (they know about the Cain, but usually not who it is, but due to him messing around with his immortality at the start they find out) and he will grow to hate the higher ups as a result.
When he randomly kills a person due to an emotional outburst he realizes just how bad he needs to learn to control himself and always stay calm.
By the end of the story his personality is much more "unified" and he will be more of a leader, and emotionally stable.
Brandon Edwards
You write the word ‘well’ too much
Josiah Nguyen
This is by far the best thing you’ve written in the thread, and I suspect that has to do with the fact that it includes an actual plot. See for why I thought there would be too much exposition.
Nathan Gonzalez
It’s FMA/Blue Exorcist/Fairy Tail/Index, then? Wait, isn’t that just what Black Clover is?
Cameron Anderson
>834 words >Used the word "well" 4 times >You use the word "well' too much. Stop being a faggot and offer real criticism you faggot.
Wyatt Lewis
I actually really enjoyed this, I think it fits the original idea quite well, and is definitely better written than my non-native-speaking ass could do
Ethan Morales
Can you draw at all? If so why are you posting instead of drawing?
Jacob Davis
>There’s no way you could give all of this info across naturally >what is storytelling
Nathan Foster
Skipped. Onward to next post
Joseph Rodriguez
Ok, then every time you use that word it’s weird and jarring. There’s almost no flow to anything you wrote because you keep going off on tangents. Just say what you mean the first time instead of beginning one thing and then having to specify what you mean.
I can’t see any storytelling in OPs posts. I just see a bunch of worldbuilding.
Liam Cruz
>fanfiction.net thread is still up Are mods dare I say, based and redpilled?
Evan Murphy
The use of "well" was because, christ, look at all the macguffins and crap moving and shaping OP's worlds. I used "well" and uncertainty to communicate Kreis trying to explain something he barely understands himself to a newbie. That poster isn't actually me, but this seems like it could be fun. How about you give it a go? Here are the rules: Anyone who wants to play should write chapter one of OP's fantasy world, with it's abundance of curses, systems, rankings, blah blah blah.
First Person or Third Person is fine. We want to try and make OP's autistic world into a palatable story.
Chapter One is Kries sitting on a bench, sees an old man about to get hit by a car, saves him, and hears the old man say "I've finally found somebody." What can (you) make out of that?
Now, you don't have to incorporate ALL of OP's plot devices and systems into the first chapter, but try and see how much you can without it being boring exposition.
The premise we're operating under is "How would we show this story to others organically, without assuming that the readers have OP's world building pages."
Seriously, anyone up for the challenge? It's both a writing challenge for those so inclined and might also help OP see how world-building and story telling can clash or work together.
worldbuilding is not what you should focus on when pitching OP, nobody cares about your locations and epic lore
Jaxson Morgan
Condense your pitch to 2 sentences tops.
Utlimately, what is this about? Why should I care? Why should I read/watch this over the dozens of other superpower stories?
Parker Robinson
A boy who feels no purpose is granted the option to take a path where he can do great things, but the path is clouded in darkness. In a world where lots of things are happening and every event causes a chain reaction he needs to be able to not only make the right choices, but be strong enough to back those choices up.
I think that would explain it in a very broad sense, it's focused on both the way the world functions and his personal mentality. Also I do recognize how generalized it sounds, I'm not so gifted with words which is why I wouldn't write this as a light novel, but rather a manga so I could show instead of tell.
Camden Harris
This thread is a fucking mess.
Ian Peterson
definitely, but personally Im enjoying it.
Asher Sanders
so HxH meets One Piece
Kayden Hill
One Piece was definitely a big inspiration for this, HxH helped shape the magic-system obviously as well.
Jaxson Barnes
no, others would not enjoy reading it
there, you can stop
Jayden Hall
FUND IT
Christian Baker
That might be the most generic synopsis I've ever read. At least the end of it makes it seem somewhat interesting, if only because so many of these stories don't give the protagonist hard choices or consequences for their actions. I agree with this user that you should write a chapter or a few and see where you end up rather than just having a whole bunch of ideas laying around, then put it on fanfiction.net or, since you want to do a manga, maybe draw up some storyboards. I feel like you might want to give up on the manga idea, unless you either already know how to draw or you're trying to become the next ONE, scribbles and all. If you're serious about making this a reality (and this isn't just a troll thread), you should at least dedicate some time each day to learning how to draw or practice drawing along with writing chapters/storyboards.
Samuel Butler
>A boy who feels no purpose is granted the option to take a path where he can do great things, but the path is clouded in darkness.
this is every marvel hero story ever
Xavier Watson
>I feel like you might want to give up on the manga idea He shouldn't try to write manga, period. Unless he's Japanese or French, has a shitload of money or has contacts in the industry he's never getting published in a Japanese magazine.
Jeremiah Smith
Fucking faggot, if coming up with a decent story was that easy, there'd be successful writers everywhere. First off, you want to make a shonenshit, which automatically makes it a terrible idea. It took me 4 years to come up with the basic outline of my story, and you think you can just wing it. I've gone through multiple versions of the story, added some things, removed others, while you're just piling everything up like a hoarding autist. You should ditch the idea altogether, I mean- even if you through the sheer power of will managed to put together something not completely garbage; it'd all go to waste, since you have no creative talents, like writing or drawing, to make anything out of your brilliant idea. Hope you fail, faggot.
Sebastian Cruz
Yeah, I guess. I was just thinking more so in terms of comics in general when writing my post. Calm down.
Jeremiah Reyes
Do you unironically think I just made this shit up in 5 minutes? No dude, I've been thinking about this for a longer time, and it's gone through significant changes in all fields over time. Don't pretend you're the only person in the world to ever put thought into something.
Isaac White
>autist spends 4 years on a shit idea and is mad when someone has a better idea than them
