>Thread Question: Which webcomic character would you date? >Please keep simping to the After Dark thread and keep targeted attacks to a minimum. Do you realize how these contradict each other?
Jose Watson
that means irl simping
Aiden Kelly
>scared of change everyone just thinks you're a lazy faggot you're blowing it out of proportion
denied digits because wrong poster that's my bad ardi
Jack Jackson
Just a shame the writing is never good
Jackson Hughes
>Vanna Holy shit my DICKKKKKKKK
Julian Peterson
>Otto trying to recover after getting BTFO'd last thread Man, shut up
Nolan White
I don’t wanna come across as a dick, but you really do need to hear this. I won’t sugar coat it, but I’ll try to be as respectful as possible here.
You will always be the least liked, least talented person in any group you enter. Even those who don’t hate you are simply indifferent. The jokes in your comic fall flat. The combat is uninspired. Every ending feels rushed. There’s never a pay off to anything. Every character speaks like they’re the same person. You are redundant in a lot of your dialog. The lore is milquetoast at best.your comic does not even have sex appeal to fall back on.
I really hate to break this to you because I’m not a hater, but you honestly have such an unremarkable series that the chances of you developing an audience is close to impossible. It exists, but existing is the only thing it has going for it.
Creative endeavors just aren’t for you, I think you should stop wasting your money and invest in a proper career. Maybe go back to school or something. You have no future in the arts. And I mean that in the most sincere way possible.
Lincoln Fisher
>Mayng shuddup No one will ever respect you enough to listen as long as you keep talking like a slackjawed rape ape.
Carter Ortiz
I just realized they're fighting the racist rabbit. Based
Jace Rogers
>has to misquote me >doesn't even deny being Capeworld comics Hey, how about you have another autistic shitfit about power levels, retard.
Bentley Torres
>Please keep simping to the After Dark thread and keep targeted attacks to a minimum. Maybe these threads are not meant to live.
Benjamin King
it's almost over user soon you will be free
Jonathan Parker
I don't think I've ever read a worse post in my entire life. What was the point of that? Good thing karma exists.
I’ll level with you man, you should have rewritten this script a few more times. While technically correct, it’s very awkward and doesn’t have any sense of flow to it. Your prose leaves a lot to be desired.
The “Now Now” seems unnecessary, and none of her actions or words really tell us who she is as a personality. We needed a comment after she wiped the dirt. Either a fake maternal one to make her seem like she’s there for good will, or a direct one to show that she cares only about a clean product. We got none.
Then there’s the “kid, you are going to make me so rich!” This sentence doesn’t really work. Usually when things like this are said, they’re followed up with some comparison. I.E. “so rich I can buy a mansion.” Instead she just ends in rich. It feels unfinished, and we didn’t get a hyphen to show she was cut off.
Then there’s the “you are a bounty hunter, correct?” With the way it comes across, it’s seems more facetious than genuine. “Of course it’s fine. you are a bounty hunter, correct?” This is because of the unnecessarily formal writing. The phrase should have been reconsidered and edited to get your intent across in a more efficient way. Or at least in a more elegant form.
Since this all screams single draft energy, I feel that is likely a problem with the entire comic. Thankfully you can still make edits to transcript while maintaining the art.
Mason Reed
Minimalism is the loud token of conformity so it’s for the best
Henry Cox
Don't listen to No.129845593, he's not offering anything constructive. The only way to improve is to keep practicing. You got this, I believe in you.
I did him the kindness of being honest and bringing him into reality. Something no one else was willing to do. He shouldn’t be wasting what little time he has on this earth with a futile attempt he has no talent, promise, or future in.
Jackson Edwards
So you admit that it’s bad? Lol. You basically agreed with everything I said but sugar coated it
Jaxson Bell
I'll read this and definitely use it but in advance, almost every dialogue I post on those pages is a placeholder meant to make me remember the overall main idea of what you they are saying, not much else.
With that said lets see... >now now... I can probably delet that yep. The comment after she wiped out the dirt is the "bingo!" meaning she did it just to recognize his face or something similar (though he's likely confusing it with affection).
>so rich I didn't knew that about that sentence, thank you. That's my ESL shining through. Will fix when I write it properly.
>you are a bounty hunter, right? this dialogue will continue next page with a "perfect, take the kid and get rid of it" line, so i'm not sure how i'd rephrase it. Again english might be failing me there.
Overall while I absolutely planned to rewrite all of that, this is very helpful since I'd likely incur in similar mistakes anyways in the rewrite, thanks user.
Oh wow, it IS racist rabbit. What an odd thing for Terra to reference
Justin Peterson
We have to defeat racism and the rabbits that espouse it if we're ever going to have a mulatto slave race.
Jace Rogers
I did it! My character's popular! XD
Hunter Morales
There is nothing remotely funny about this whatsoever. You'd fit right in with some of the most successful webcomics of the 2000s
Jaxson Flores
What's weirder is basically being the OG version of Anikka, Marine and Abigail from Pryde Pizza. Not to mention Omeow explicitly referencing this character here with his OC "Star Seal." Do you ever get upset by how many people rip you off?
Connor Ross
Just draw porn already you fucking faggot
Christopher Richardson
Upset? Nope, not in the slightest. I've never actually seen those characters, I think.
I keep hearing about Star Seal, but I can't really find it. Is it good? I bet it is.
Kevin Flores
He or she comissions all of the art.
Juan Rodriguez
Black guy fucks the blonde behind him while racist rabbit watches
Asher Murphy
Check the after dark thread, Krump’s porn is in there. Closest you’ll get to official Renata porn
Henry Garcia
>I keep hearing about Star Seal, but I can't really find it How have you been in any of these threads and not heard about Oi?
Eli Gray
Emmett and Kelsie (the black guy and the blonde girl) ARE dating. Zipper (Racist Rabbit) is Emmett's roommate. Maybe I'll cook up some characters sheets for them.
It's crazy how "Racist Rabbit" became a thing, but MAN does it crack me up.
>It's crazy how "Racist Rabbit" became a thing, but MAN does it crack me up. Enjoy it user, this is your peak, a meme that somebody else made.
Parker Ward
>it's one (1) disc-shaped potato
Here is one (1) (you)
Aaron Ross
And when one peak is reached, you head for the next one. This is going to be fun. :D
Benjamin Reyes
You're never getting out of the foothills dude. No amount of soiboi spite is going to change that.
Oliver Wright
Thankfully, that's not up to you. And what spite? I feel no spite. I'm just here to have fun.
Adrian Ramirez
“Funny.” “But the kid is a side gig.”
Try “Funny you should say that.” “The kid was just a side gig.” “The reason I came out here was find you.”
James Bailey
Dude, take from Renata’s playbook. Ignore everything. Once you start fighting back you look like a douchebag. Just look at how many people hate Oi for his cringy responses every time he gets called out for over shilling
Robert Campbell
That’s the same argument as “I’m not mad, I’m laughing right now.” Never once has anyone believed it, and it always comes across as coping. Just shut up and take the high ground.
Hunter Sanders
You either have no idea what spite is or you've conveniently forgotten the last thread. Doesn't make any difference in the end anyway I guess.
Colton Mitchell
All we learned last thread is that Terra is a faggot who tries to control how people use his characters.
Elijah Green
>“The reason I came out here was find you.” Don't correct anyone ever again.
Robert Torres
If I couldn't handle a couple of insults, I wouldn't even be on Yea Forums. I think the responses are simply COMICAL.
David Howard
You know what they say, you can lead a horse to self-awareness...
