How would you fix this?

How would you fix this?

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change the art and the writing and the premise and all the characters

Get rid of her sandals.

title and cover suggest orgy shenanigans

Either take it to its logical conclusion (horror), make it an exaggeration of reality (early Kids Next Door), or play with dramatic irony.

I would make it more interesting by making the change sudden in society and as such the whole story turning into what is pretty much a broken distopia.

A Jimmy Neutron movie kind of thing, where suddenly kids are the ones in control of the adults, that sounds fun for them at first but later problems start showing up in the whole city, and stuff turns into chaos.

That or make it more of an absurd comedy, the idea of an inverse KND could work for that too

I don't know, but that shota crossdressing story was pretty hot.

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I listened to a podcast review of the Party Panic book a while back, and apparently the most frustrating thing about that story after the awful world building is the way the little girl just shits on the mom for no reason over and over again, and gets no comeuppance while the mom never catches a break. Just make the girl slightly less of a shitbag and give the two of them some kind of reconciliation at the end, and it’d be miles better, apparently.

Imagine being nothing but an idea guy with enough time, money, energy, and backing to get as far as Enter has to hire the artists and write and make all of that material, only to waste it all on this. The only thing that went wrong was that he couldn’t obsess over a better premise in the first place.

Are the scripts still on dA?

So basically change everything and start from scratch

I just don't like the premise desu.
Looking at the thread most people agree w/ me

>desu

Eat a poison frog

>shota crossdressing story
Now I'm interested.

deviantart.com/mrenter/art/Growing-Around-Pinks-and-Blues-Version-2-711058354 is the script that pic is based on.
After looking through his gallery again, it seems he has a script based around an entire holiday where everyone crossdresses. Does anyone else think that this is definitely one of his fetishes? deviantart.com/mrenter/art/Growing-Around-Sugar-and-Snails-Season-2-789073058 I don't think that pic related is based off any script though.

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rework it so the premise is that a family moves into a town run by kids

Just make it the loli sex show Yea Forums degenerates obviously wanted it to be. There's no doubt in my mind it would have reached its kickstarter goals then.

Even if that is very fetishy, that idea for a holiday sounds really fun.

Burn it to the ground and lobotomize Enter.

Literally just make it a funny shitpost rather than some serious show that deals with deep topics. It could be like Barnyard, Sonic Boom, or Animaniacs with retarded slapstick but hits you with an actual clever joke every once in a while. The art style and characters already feel as if they should be supporting something like that rather than the slow mess Enter envisions. It's a show about kids running the world it should be crazy and hilarious as fuck. Kids act dumb, which means the show should be dumb.

I thought it was supposed to be dumb. Isn’t Enter’s only excuse for the setting making absolutely no sense “shut up, it’s a cartoon and I don’t gotta explain shit”?

It kind of is, but Enter said he wanted to tackle deep social issues in it and wanted it to be the kids version of Bojack. Kids don't want to watch that. They want emotional levity, but not depressing shit like that. He's trying to deepen something that's not that deep.